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(02-24-2021, 07:25 AM)Bunx Wrote:  Pill x Pill
Try this:
How many days away from insanity
does it take to be sane?

No voices, hallucinations, or delusions.
Is sanity the illusion?                            provactive line here

Working five days a week.
Diagnosis, the secret I keep.

No more days, I cannot sleep.
No more days wandering streets.

Pill by pill, I swallow the truth.
Despite stigma I can be of use.

How many years does it take
before you claim what was?

Realizing, you rather be you.
Then the boy society had.                 I completely concur, this line is cumbersome. perhaps a following stanza to set                                                       up the very last stamza, these complexities might be examined further: however, I like the simplicity of the poem.   perhaps it is this very simple and direct phrasing - throughout the poem - which suggest s the kind of subtle development in character that you're aware of within your self, thus and hence, "the secret I keep."    the relationship between society and it's expectations on the youth "the boy society had" are the very crux of the psychological dilemma and aptly suggested, insanity.   It is by dealing with the broader questions of society that the raging feelings which may burn within you can be called in to question.   What is your duty to society?   What aught you to feel about other idiots running around?   How can you cope with the questions and, indeed, problems of society if you, your self, have not sought to understand the common ailments of humanity that belie and poison each and every one of us.

On the whole a dynamic and soothing poem.   Damn Therapuetic actually.

Far down the rabbits hole you fell.
No one believed you climb so far.

(03-18-2021, 03:49 AM)rowens Wrote:  I'd like to have something against Canada. But then, there's Kacey Rohl.
 friend.
plutocratic polyphonous pandering 
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Messages In This Thread
Pill x Pill - by Bunx - 02-24-2021, 07:25 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by dukealien - 02-24-2021, 11:57 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by Bunx - 02-25-2021, 09:46 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by Knot - 02-25-2021, 10:12 PM
RE: Pill x Pill - by Bunx - 02-26-2021, 01:36 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by Knot - 02-26-2021, 02:52 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by rowens - 02-27-2021, 05:25 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by Bunx - 02-27-2021, 02:01 PM
RE: Pill x Pill - by rowens - 03-03-2021, 10:51 PM
RE: Pill x Pill - by Bunx - 03-04-2021, 03:26 PM
RE: Pill x Pill - by rowens - 03-05-2021, 02:03 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by Bunx - 03-05-2021, 03:19 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by rowens - 03-05-2021, 10:27 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by rowens - 03-06-2021, 12:03 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by Bunx - 03-09-2021, 05:09 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by rowens - 03-09-2021, 06:20 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by Bunx - 03-14-2021, 01:00 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by rowens - 03-18-2021, 01:41 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by rowens - 03-18-2021, 03:49 AM
RE: Pill x Pill - by Thunderembargo - 03-29-2021, 03:43 AM



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