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Revolution - The_system_screams - 04-22-2025
And maybe it dreams
of fire
but wakes up
with paperwork.
RE: Revolution - dukealien - 04-23-2025
(04-22-2025, 10:33 PM)The_system_screams Wrote: And maybe it dreamsVery nicely put. Today, the revolutionary spirit doesn't devour its young (or its elders, depending on who you ask). It carbon-copies them to illegibility.
of fire
but wakes up
with paperwork.
(Does anyone else here remember carbon copies?)
RE: Revolution - busker - 04-23-2025
(04-22-2025, 10:33 PM)The_system_screams Wrote: And maybe it dreamsI like it!!!
of fire
but wakes up
with paperwork.
Fire>>>paper
you can see what ensues
RE: Revolution - Mark A Becker - 04-25-2025
(04-22-2025, 10:33 PM)The_system_screams Wrote: And maybe it dreamsI'd shorten this short one even more, maybe make it a syllabic monostich:
of fire
but wakes up
with paperwork.
Revolution dreams of fire
but wakes up to paperwork
RE: Revolution - own - 04-26-2025
I really like this! it's short, it gets to the point, and so much truth is held in these words,,,,