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windy poems - Miley - 05-07-2024
how
wind surrenders
w/o loss
continuously laughter
pressed around
all blades of grass
RE: windy poems - dukealien - 05-09-2024
(05-07-2024, 01:35 PM)Miley Wrote: howIntriguing. Whether, for example, to treat the white space as a colon (following answers the implied question) or em dash (following continues the description). The small white space (double space) after "continuously" also suggests a missing or implied mark of punctuation.
wind surrenders
w/o loss
continuously laughter
pressed around
all blades of grass
But the whole point of wind is that it presses *unequally* on different surfaces of each individual blade of grass, though more or less similarly on all blades. Otherwise it would just be pressure: wind is diversity, inequality.
That's static, at a given time. Wind, like sound of voices, varies over time in waves. Or, of course, laughter.
So, worth thinking about: much in little. Short form success.