totaltrainwreck
01-20-2013, 04:19 AM
This poem is a lot more simple and plain-worded than what I've been reading on this site, but I feel that sometimes you have to be concise to effectively get your meaning across. To me, it has a quality that you lose when you get too wordy. It has a lot of meaning to me, but in the end it's just about a girl that I used to know.
I've always planned on writing this
Although its been over a year.
Now I must admit the guilt I've felt,
Perhaps afraid of what I might hear.
Those many nights and days ago
Although I've tried to forget,
Creep upon me now in my land of snow
With ghostly whispers of regret.
Our locale was the infinite blue horizon,
Whose untold beauty I embraced,
And my ultimate goal was to convince you
That your trust in me was not misplaced.
With a triumphant grin I scaled the rocks,
Beseeching the gods of the sea,
But there you were 30 feet ashore
Worrying about my wellbeing.
You were afraid of the might of the ocean,
Of the waves and prehistoric sharks.
I pushed you past your boundaries
With lush fantasies of underwater meadowlarks.
Tweeting and singing and brightening the depths,
Upon your heart I wished to leave my mark,
Because when faced with undeniable truths like love
The universe is bare and stark.
So I pushed you past your boundaries
There was nowhere for you to hide.
And with your strong reluctance
You allowed me to be your guide.
So towards the murky ocean we went
Towards the very place you loathed.
I promised I would fend off the prehistoric sharks
If they snuck up on us while we roved.
Grabbing my arm for support
As wet sand sunk beneath our feet,
I was determined to help you conquer
The fears which made you admit defeat.
And although you wouldn't go
Further than ankle-deep,
I felt as though I had been your guide
Climbing the summit of a mountain most steep.
I've always planned on writing this
Although its been over a year.
Now I must admit the guilt I've felt,
Perhaps afraid of what I might hear.
Those many nights and days ago
Although I've tried to forget,
Creep upon me now in my land of snow
With ghostly whispers of regret.
Our locale was the infinite blue horizon,
Whose untold beauty I embraced,
And my ultimate goal was to convince you
That your trust in me was not misplaced.
With a triumphant grin I scaled the rocks,
Beseeching the gods of the sea,
But there you were 30 feet ashore
Worrying about my wellbeing.
You were afraid of the might of the ocean,
Of the waves and prehistoric sharks.
I pushed you past your boundaries
With lush fantasies of underwater meadowlarks.
Tweeting and singing and brightening the depths,
Upon your heart I wished to leave my mark,
Because when faced with undeniable truths like love
The universe is bare and stark.
So I pushed you past your boundaries
There was nowhere for you to hide.
And with your strong reluctance
You allowed me to be your guide.
So towards the murky ocean we went
Towards the very place you loathed.
I promised I would fend off the prehistoric sharks
If they snuck up on us while we roved.
Grabbing my arm for support
As wet sand sunk beneath our feet,
I was determined to help you conquer
The fears which made you admit defeat.
And although you wouldn't go
Further than ankle-deep,
I felt as though I had been your guide
Climbing the summit of a mountain most steep.