12-08-2012, 06:34 PM
12-11-2012, 06:41 AM
Hi TA
Quick pause while I went and checked out the rules for a Tanka
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Not sure if allowed or meant to have a title, but either way your's works well enough without.
Well for a start you seam to have kept to the rules / guidlines.
I appreciated the slightly dark honesty and humour in this one and felt that the lines gathered strength and momentum as they progressed with a great finish line.
Good stuff, thanks for the read. I like.
Quick pause while I went and checked out the rules for a Tanka
!Not sure if allowed or meant to have a title, but either way your's works well enough without.
Well for a start you seam to have kept to the rules / guidlines.
I appreciated the slightly dark honesty and humour in this one and felt that the lines gathered strength and momentum as they progressed with a great finish line.
Good stuff, thanks for the read. I like.
12-11-2012, 09:38 AM
it sounds like you live for the fireworks 