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Allow me to uncover myself


I'll slowly peel my skin away


You will only see bones and ribbons of tissue


Not a monster who will leave you mauled




I'd give you everything

Without the want to take




If you'll let me

Hello Madame V, lovely to see you.

I still think this is a good poem, in an uncomfortable sort of way

wow! lovely to see you here B

And thank you

(06-08-2011, 06:23 AM)violet Wrote: [ -> ]Allow me to uncover myself


I'll slowly peel my skin away


You will only see bones and ribbons of tissue


Not a monster who will leave you mauled




I'd give you everything

Without the want to take




If you'll let me

another nice short,
did you mean to have so much white space in between the lines?

I love how you made not only the narrative of the piece engaging, but it was such a nice character piece for the narrator as well. It's like a darker version of the fox from "the little prince" (my favorite character!)

Like it. Like metaphor you put in it.
Wonderful piece!
R.Y.