Poetry Forum

Albuquerque skies
blue as our baby boy's eyes--
we could settle here

Your haiku are not awkward, they're tangible statements. They're formed well so that something new is said in each line without an awkward flow. A lot of people write incomplete sentences just to fit the format, which I've never liked. I think you have a good grasp on haiku.

(12-13-2023, 03:38 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: [ -> ]Albuquerque skies
blue as our baby boy's eyes--
we could settle here

Very pleasant.  And then I thought, undocumented headed north?  Curse you, current events!