Don't be afraid of death.
He is tender and warm,
like a Beef Wellington,
served with a tankard of ale
in a country pub.
All you have to do
is take the first bite.
i like this one jack.
for me it works fine for me without the last two lines but even so i still like it
thanks for the read.
Thank you, Billy. I was afraid you might savage this one, as I wasn't sure if it was any good, so your comment really eases me.
hehe, if ever i do go a little overboard it's never done with malice
but sometimes it's like picking a scab, you keep at it till it bleeds anew
(11-20-2010, 01:51 PM)billy Wrote: [ -> ]hehe, if ever i do go a little overboard it's never done with malice
but sometimes it's like picking a scab, you keep at it till it bleeds anew
Oh no, I wasn't criticising your honesty at all; on the contrary, I respect your critques more than most because you treat me like an artist, and not a figure of pity or a soul mate haha.
I was worried about your response to this one because I thought it might have shades of "paper planes," as, like that piece, it was inspired by another writer.