Hello Matt,
This poem has a lovely feel to it. It is a bit vague as to meaning, but somehow that doesn't diminish the pleasure of reading it. Also, it was fun to try various interpretations on and see how they fit.
There are several astronomy trigger words (cosmos, aligning, imploding, star) that make me visualize planetary alignments, black holes, and reaching the end of time physically. There are also several religious words (divine, parchment, bloody, sacred, unholy) that instead make me visualize predestination and more of a judgment day scenario.
I love, love the actors coming for their toll. In the astronomy interpretation, they would be the planets and constellations who have been observed over the centuries and used to predict everything from weather to the coming of kings. Their alignment foreshadows the coming of the end of the world. Or they could even just be Jupiter and Mars etc. the planets as gods from the past, finally getting up and coming down to get us. In a more religious interpretation, I saw the actors as the characters from a scripture text, coming back at a Judgment day to be witness or judges or something. I have no idea if you intended anything like that, and I'm generally rubbish at meanings, but it was fun to postulate.
If you had a rather specific idea in mind, you might want to include some trigger words to guide us to the right conclusion, or give us a key to unlocking the mystery in the title somehow. I personally didn't mind it being left open ended. The very last line about the harrowed star glowing gently and the fire in the unholy eyes, I couldn't make hide nor tail of that one, nor could I fit it into either of my clumsy attempts at interpretation.
The line "in it's singed space" is very hard to say without stumbling.
Without a better understanding of the true purpose of the poem, I hesitate to recommend more specific critique. The imagery is alluring and vivid, but what exactly is happening is too elusive. It's a bit like standing too close to an impressionist painting. The colors are lovely the lines are pleasing, but I just can't quite figure out what its a picture of. But maybe it's not meant to be a picture of anything? Perhaps the pleasing lines and the reader's questions are the purpose.
Anyway, I don't know if any of that helps, but I did enjoy reading it as it is, elusiveness and all.
--Quix
(05-17-2016, 09:31 AM)Mattp Wrote: [ -> ]Shadows of the Cosmos
Watch as we succumb to the divine.
Plans written on fragile parchment are blurring,
and all the bloody, sacred shadows of the cosmos
are aligning - seek shelter,
before these old actors
of busted, dirty decades
come for their toll.
We are imploding;
and the last lonely star,
harrowed in its singed space,
is glowing as gently
as the fire in our unholy eyes.