When Shadows Dance
#1
That was really good. It felt like something I might read in a book to get children interested in verse. The topic though was fun for adults. I love the boldness of the shadow, and how the roles were reversed between the two.

Really well done.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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#2
I, too, enjoyed the role reversal - I love a good twist at the end of a poem! I felt that the poem flowed very well. Next time I see my shadow, I'll look at it a little differently I think.
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#3
I like this too. It is fine. To me maybe it is more sweet than funny.

But this was a fine read.
Thank you

serge
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#4
This poem made great use of personification of the Shadow and gave the view of the love story through the view of an inanimate object. Good Job!

-Shailen Naick
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#5
I love this...such a clever and wonderfully happy poem. Put a smile on my face after a long shift Smile thanks for a cheerful and heartwarming read Smile
"We are the music makers
And we are the dreamers of dreams
Wandering by lone sea breakers
And sitting by desolate streams" ~ Arthur O'Shaughnessy


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