Who else.
#1
Straight from the heart to the page no censors.

Who else could piss me off but give me so much joy
you? Damn right but don't let the compliment get to you
Blown head
Trust, over the years I've wished worse.
Secrets? You know them all
Me? You know my soul
That's dangerous...
I've been known to break bodies for less
I can't hurt you, not consciously
But it seems that the subconscious has it in for you
Wants to put an end to you.
It ended us....but it backfired
Now we're what we were meant to be
Best friends for eternity
well...maybe a couple of centuries
since you seem to lack the faith in forever
I seem to recall that back in '07
You stole my heart and you still have it
holding it until someone worthy deserves it
For that I thank you
My muse
My Goddess
My Best Friend
My Love
My Everything
Until someone new comes along of course
I kid don't kill me.....
Isn't It Evil to Live Backwards~Loaded Lux


I'm Batman, act up and I'll squeeze Hecklers/You'll die before the first clip drops, Heath Ledger!
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#2
Goddess? Really? I think you over-exaggerated your feelings just a tad.

Thank you for the poem, you are a good friend.
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#3
I am impressed for that one.
apart from women.

cool! (no bc it seems one has to mark non-sarcastic comments by now: I mean it. I like the fervor and the speed.)

cheers :-)

but maybe for the caps (so that Leanne's sarcasmisms are pleased too. anyway)
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#4
loved the pace and free thought element of this
AJ
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#5
(01-17-2013, 05:17 PM)arbil_poieo Wrote:  Goddess? Really? I think you over-exaggerated your feelings just a tad.

Thank you for the poem, you are a good friend.

this is why men can't express themselves to women.
Isn't It Evil to Live Backwards~Loaded Lux


I'm Batman, act up and I'll squeeze Hecklers/You'll die before the first clip drops, Heath Ledger!
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#6
(01-18-2013, 12:41 AM)Arriedo Wrote:  this is why men can't express themselves to women.

You know, the woman I'm still in a state of confusion with. She's easy to share poetry with. She told me she was a goddess, and that that's why I couldn't help but love her. She told me she couldn't hang out with girls, because they were too jealous of her beauty. So she had to hang out with men. That kind of stuff excites me. That vanity. That cruelty.
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#7
We love the confident types, those are the ones worth having.
Isn't It Evil to Live Backwards~Loaded Lux


I'm Batman, act up and I'll squeeze Hecklers/You'll die before the first clip drops, Heath Ledger!
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#8
I just wanted to say that I read this, but I couldn't really formulate a response. Will get back to you in due time.
I'll be there in a minute.
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#9
(01-18-2013, 12:41 AM)Arriedo Wrote:  
(01-17-2013, 05:17 PM)arbil_poieo Wrote:  Goddess? Really? I think you over-exaggerated your feelings just a tad.

Thank you for the poem, you are a good friend.

this is why men can't express themselves to women.
You can express anything, I'll write you one as my response.
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#10
It ended us....but it backfired
Now we're what we were meant to be
Best friends for eternity
well...maybe a couple of centuries
since you seem to lack the faith in forever
I seem to recall that back in '07
You stole my heart and you still have it
holding it until someone worthy deserves it
For that I thank you
My muse
My Goddess
My Best Friend
My Love
My Everything
Until someone new comes along of course
I kid don't kill me...

something must be wrong with my heart, this is the second poem I've read on this forum which strikes a nerve and it is only my first day, me thinks the Gods of lost love are conspiring to make me paranoid, enjoyed the read
never make someone your priority when to them you are only an option
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#11
Yep, I really enjoyed reading this one (and again and again…). It reminded me of the line "love is eternal till it isn't anymore" from 'the world loves us and is our bitch' by Mclusky.
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#12
Now I know what I want to say. The first three quarters of this poem remind me of an Eminem rap song (or that's how i read it in my head), but then it falters out into something else.

And this line read a little awkward for me, though it was probably purposeful (that you started and ended with 'you', in which case it'd be cool if you started and ended with 'me' in that later line: "you? Damn right but don't let the compliment get to you"

Hokai then.
I'll be there in a minute.
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#13
That's a compliment because Eminem is my favorite artist, thank you.
Isn't It Evil to Live Backwards~Loaded Lux


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