Soldier
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Pawn of dictatorship
and rebellion 
died liberated
from the pursuit
of freedom
"Whenever is a really long never"
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(09-18-2022, 07:48 AM)Semicircle Wrote:  Pon of dictatorship
and rebellion 
died liberated
from the pursuit of freedom

Did you mean "pawn" in first word of poem?
Other than that, I like the epitaph style of the poem.
“All persons, living or dead, are entirely coincidental.”  Kurt Vonnegut
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(09-18-2022, 08:58 AM)TranquillityBase Wrote:  
(09-18-2022, 07:48 AM)Semicircle Wrote:  Pon of dictatorship
and rebellion 
died liberated
from the pursuit of freedom

Did you mean "pawn" in first word of poem?
Other than that, I like the epitaph style of the poem.

Thanks for catching that. Also, someone mentioned that everyone ends out like this, freed from the pursuit. What was the significance of the soldier's death then?
"Whenever is a really long never"
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(09-21-2022, 04:58 AM)Semicircle Wrote:  
(09-18-2022, 08:58 AM)TranquillityBase Wrote:  
(09-18-2022, 07:48 AM)Semicircle Wrote:  Pon of dictatorship
and rebellion 
died liberated
from the pursuit of freedom

Did you mean "pawn" in first word of poem?
Other than that, I like the epitaph style of the poem.

Thanks for catching that. Also, someone mentioned that everyone ends out like this, freed from the pursuit. What was the significance of the soldier's death then?

It's for sure the story of every soldier who fought in one of the big (or small) Revolutions in our history.  I'll actually add one other thing: maybe move "of freedom" to be the last line.
“All persons, living or dead, are entirely coincidental.”  Kurt Vonnegut
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