The Scented Candle
#1
The Scented Candle


warm feelings rest
beside

a scented candle
flame

licking the chilled
air

behind an open
book
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#2
(01-08-2022, 12:43 AM)Torkelburger Wrote:  The Scented Candle


warm feelings rest
beside

a scented candle
flame

licking the chilled
air

behind an open
book
I think it holds together pretty well. Maybe should be candle's.
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#3
(01-08-2022, 12:43 AM)Torkelburger Wrote:  The Scented Candle


warm feelings rest
beside

a scented candle
flame

licking the chilled
air

behind an open
book

I like “licking the chilled air”
Agree with Tiger on the apostrophe. A flame itself has no scent
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#4
Thank you both!

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The Scented Candle

warm feelings rest
beside

a scented candle's
flame

licking the chilled
air

behind an open
book
Reply




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