After Solstice
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After Solstice


a promise of sun
of nights a little less long-

are we there yet, Dad?
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(12-23-2021, 02:25 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  After Solstice


a promise of sun
of nights a little less long-

are we there yet, Dad?


Hey Paul,

The familiarity of the last line works really well.

That said, the title not so much (or titles in general for a senryu). 

Fun one, thanks,
Mark
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