Rayuela* by TranquilityBase
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Rayuela

I was going through your books,
the ones I didn’t keep,
to trade them into a strange world
that never knew you.
I came to Rayuela;
it looked as if it had been left out in the rain,
or fallen into a toilet,
swollen, warped, stained,
I started to toss it into a garbage can
but instead thumbed  through it
to find hundreds of pressed flowers
hiding every 50 pages or so.
They are all the same flower,
now almost transparent white
more like bizarre squashed insects
but I recognized them from the photos,
the pictures composed of dried flowers
that you made in Spain:  a seahorse,
a goldfish, two lovers.

Now this book is a relic of your passage,
the touch of your fingers
preserved one hundred times over:

I’m thinking a cedar box,
sealed with copper nails,
added to my reliquary of pens found 
when we cleaned out your car,
and the sun-faded Topo Chico bottle found in your garden.
Then I will build a shrine
out of limestone and cedar
in the oak grove that we cleared together.
Finally I will have a place to pray
and a spirit worth praying to.


* Original thread can be found here.
The Soufflé isn’t the soufflé; the soufflé is the recipe. --Clara 
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#2
This is one of the most sublime, poignant poems posted on this site. A favourite.
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#3
Spot on
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#4
I am truly honored, thank you.

I've learned more about writing, and probably more importantly, reading, poetry in the last seven months here in the Pen than I did in the 50 years before I got here.  

And thank you to all who read/critiqued my poems, and made me a better, or at least a more aware, poet as a result.

TqB
“All persons, living or dead, are entirely coincidental.”  Kurt Vonnegut
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#5
Congrats Tim.

Best, Knot
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(09-06-2021, 11:44 PM)Knot Wrote:  Congrats Tim.

Best, Knot

Thanks Knot.  And I haven't forgotten it's overdue for revision...
“All persons, living or dead, are entirely coincidental.”  Kurt Vonnegut
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#7
Well done, Tim. What sells this for me are the finely tuned details that solicit an emotional response and compell the reader to mourn along with the narrator. 
A gem. Keep them coming  Beg
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#8
Really well deserved. Always a pleasure to read them but this one is something else. Congrats on the spotlight TranquilityBase!
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#9
As an aside, I bought a copy of the English translation of Rayuela after reading this poem. And greatly surprised my boss, who hails from Buenos Aires.
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#10
I hadn't read this. It's a beautiful piece. Excellent choice to spotlight.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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(09-07-2021, 11:22 AM)busker Wrote:  As an aside, I bought a copy of the English translation of Rayuela after reading this poem. And greatly surprised my boss, who hails from Buenos Aires.

This delights me to no end.  A boss who recognizes Cortazar is a boss worth hanging onto.
“All persons, living or dead, are entirely coincidental.”  Kurt Vonnegut
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#12
Tim!

It’s good to see this piece in the spotlight, as it is most worthy of the recognition.

Your poem is a heartfelt homage to your son, and I think he’d be honored by your thoughtfulness.

Thank you for introducing me to him.
… Mark
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(09-08-2021, 05:55 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  Tim!

It’s good to see this piece in the spotlight, as it is most worthy of the recognition.

Your poem is a heartfelt homage to your son, and I think he’d be honored by your thoughtfulness.

Thank you for introducing me to him.
… Mark

Thanks Mark.  What I remember best about this poem was the wonderful discussion/critiques from Knot and you and Busker and others.  There've been many fine critiques since then, but there was something special about that discussion.  It really embodied the best of Pig Pen for a newbie like me.

TqB
“All persons, living or dead, are entirely coincidental.”  Kurt Vonnegut
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