Trigger No. 47
#1
The cracked spine
of an Orwell book
is all it takes
to send me into the downward spiral.

The borrowed book cracked
and you texted me
thinking of my bibliophilia
and I texted back “cheap 70s bookbinding”.

Now I hate the book
because you thought it would matter.
It would have been OK
if you’d set it on fire
and danced around it.

I’d sure like to.
"Take what you need and leave the rest"
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#2
(02-20-2021, 10:51 AM)TranquillityBase Wrote:  The cracked spine
of an Orwell book
is all it takes
to send me into the downward spiral.                         this should be "a" downward spiral, unless you show why you use a def. article here

The borrowed book cracked                       the simple observation implies meaning for the relationship, perhaps the relationship itself is Orwellian
and you texted me                                        if you could refer to the various cracks that Winston experiences in 1984, you would add new meaning
thinking of my bibliophilia                                 your love for books in lieu of real meaning is fascinating
and I texted back “cheap 70s bookbinding”.         the convenience of meta-programs is quintessentially "Orwellian", you could expand this idea 

Now I hate the book
because you thought it would matter.
It would have been OK
if you’d set it on fire
and danced around it.                                          perhaps your referring to Animal Farm or the entire Orwellian Anthology; a shocking image

I’d sure like to.
plutocratic polyphonous pandering 
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#3
Hi Thunder, thanks for reading and the comments. I will play with your ideas.  The fact that it was an Orwell book was an accident (it was his collected essays v. 1, cracked at "Bookshop Memories").  But I can see how I might work that to the advantage of the primary sentiment. 

I'm not sure what you mean by "the convenience of meta-programs is quintessentially "Orwellian"". Would you explain?
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#4
Hey TB, I think this was well written. I actually really like it. My favorite is the third stanza and the very last line...it’s very cleverly funny. But I also really enjoy the second stanza, too. It’s just too random and specific at the same.

I like how it can be literal or metaphorical depending on the reader or even a bit of both. I read the first and third stanza as more literal and the second as metaphorical. It became less about the book and more about the relationship.

We all have that object, movie, or song that brings back memories and all the anger back so I thought this was an interesting poem that really captured that kind of a relationship.
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