poinsettia field
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sunset breeze;
the poinsettia field 
breathes red fire
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Hi, although I'm unsure about the use of abstract imagery in short form poetry such as haiku I do like the image that you have presented here and seeing as though you haven't specified that it is a haiku then it's fine with me. Have you played around with line structure because I feel that moving line 1 to the end would work better, also do you need 'red'?

Just a couple of thoughts, cheers for the read and the beautiful image,

Mark
feedback award way aye man
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(10-06-2020, 11:16 PM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  Hi, although I'm unsure about the use of abstract imagery in short form poetry such as haiku I do like the image that you have presented here and seeing as though you haven't specified that it is a haiku then it's fine with me. Have you played around with line structure because I feel that moving line 1 to the end would work better, also do you need 'red'?

Just a couple of thoughts, cheers for the read and the beautiful image,

Mark

Hi Mark,

Thanks for the crit and the thoughts! 

Cheers
Tanvi
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