Wheatfield with Crows (Cinquain)
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There, lies
melancholy:
forces of renewal
beneath troubled skies--a wheatfield
with crows.

Adam DH Torkelson
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(07-31-2020, 12:14 AM)Torkelburger Wrote:  There, lies
melancholy:
forces of renewal
beneath troubled skies--a wheatfield
with crows.

Adam DH Torkelson

A nice image and thought. Though critique was not requested, can't help thinking how (outside the form) this could be even more spare and stark -

[was going to insert an example, but it would have been a rewrite, so, no].

Good, thanks for posting.
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#3
Beautiful image! I like the Wheatfield with crows passage because you took me to place I've never been before.
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#4
I like the underbelly of this piece things beneath things, it certain meets the Cinquain requirements and then some, but if you are looking for a different slant maybe show us melancholy and expand the visual. Just a thought and very much enjoyed as is. Best Keith

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