Double Baby Carriage (Senryu)
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Double Baby Carriage


Husband pushes twins
trim wife runs along beside
looking much relieved.
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(10-10-2019, 08:48 AM)dukealien Wrote:  Double Baby Carriage


Husband pushes twins
trim wife runs along beside
looking much relieved.

Hey Duke. I enjoyed this on first read. When I came back to it I wondered why the wife was running. How quickly is the husband pushing this double carriage?
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(10-11-2019, 12:45 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  
(10-10-2019, 08:48 AM)dukealien Wrote:  Double Baby Carriage


Husband pushes twins
trim wife runs along beside
looking much relieved.

Hey Duke. I enjoyed this on first read. When I came back to it I wondered why the wife was running. How quickly is the husband pushing this double carriage?

Pretty fast - keeping up (g). Perhaps "jogs" in place of "runs?"
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