First Day
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First Day

Today is a big one,
my first stroll into pre-k.
Standing for moms phone,
smiling for a picture
on my first day.

There is a speaker above,
in the corner of the room.
"Best place, to learn",
why I'm here I presume.

Soon I meet my teacher,
she gave me a look,
that I did not ignore.

A noise shocked me,
a noise going directly to my head,
A siren going on, again and again.
A siren that will not leave my head.

I am told to get under the desk,
also told that is not a test.
Thinking all I needed to was my best,
to get through pre-k.

The boy had no clue,
today was
a live-shooter drill day.

**Wrote this after seeing a news article about a school doing this drill on the first day of elementary school**
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Rob Cave
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#2
You have a shift in consciousness at the last stanza, stanzas 2 and 3 feel like filler, otherwise I like the idea.
How thoughtful
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Thanks for the feedback Weeded, I agree that is a filler element in the 2nd, 3rd stanza's I'll definitely try and convey those ideas in a more interesting tone. I re-worded the second in hopes it is a little more interesting.
Thanks for the read!!
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--mark twain
Rob Cave
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