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                         Stationed 

       Every time she smiles,
       or nods in recognition,
I feel as though we came from the same world.



                   War of Worlds

By all means, learn skills in all forms of weapons,
but when it comes to it, stick to your own gun,
be it only a shape made with your index finger and thumb.
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#2
would come work better? no pun intended. i do like the 2nd one it has a certain insight in that last line.
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#3
It was come second. Then I changed it back to came. Came makes it more definite and unchangeable that we were never from the same world.
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#4
Admirably brief and, well, admirable.  The first, in particular, strikes a chord (oh! the lost red planet!)

Ahem.  Not to detract from simplicity and brevity, but we forget the third (or social) finger: in opposition to the thumb, it forms the firm base from which the index finger (ex)presses its decision.  It's needed even with rayguns (trust me on this).

But seriously, very good.
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#5
I don't ever know what to think of what's not seriously. Everybody plainfully knows that I have no sense of humor. Or that my sense of humor is flawed by human frailty.
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#6
on another reading i see you're right.

(03-28-2019, 09:27 PM)rowens Wrote:  It was come second. Then I changed it back to came. Came makes it more definite and unchangeable that we were never from the same world.
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