03-26-2019, 12:23 PM
flotilla
touring the islands
rogue wave dumps man overboard
yellow life vests fly
touring the islands
rogue wave dumps man overboard
yellow life vests fly
flotilla
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03-26-2019, 12:23 PM
flotilla
touring the islands rogue wave dumps man overboard yellow life vests fly
03-26-2019, 08:02 PM
You could lose the first line. But even at two lines, it's more a sentence than a short poem.
Rogue wave / man overboard /yellow....fly is an alternative, but rather plain. Keep looking.
03-27-2019, 08:30 AM
thanks for the feedback busker
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