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behind the all inclusive hotels
with their happy hours
and harmless chatter
wave upon wave
crashes on the beach
in asphyxiated silence,
trying to intrude on us,
on us,
who, even dancing close
to another last frontier,
would not see water
nor taste salt and iron.
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(07-04-2018, 06:03 AM)vagabond Wrote:  protected

behind the all inclusive hotels
with their happy hours
and harmless chatter
wave upon wave
crashes on the beach
in asphyxiated silence,
trying to intrude on us,
on us,
who, even dancing close
to another last frontier,
would not see water
nor taste salt and iron.

This put me much in mind of "Dover Beach" (which I had to go back and re-read to find out why, a valuable gift in itself).  Introducing the social/personal aspect late rather than early is effective.  Another way I look at the ending is by way of the old man sent to prison who wisecracked, "those guys don't realize they all have longer sentences than I do."  George Burns, but I don't remember the name of the movie.

Excellent and thought provoking.
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thanks duke (even though i think it s far from excellent).
it s just something i wrote after reading a newspaper article.. not sure if the topic is recognizable. had to google dover beach and found a scifi novel and a poem.. did you mean the poem ?
oh, and thanks for introducing me to george burns .
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(07-05-2018, 04:31 AM)vagabond Wrote:  thanks duke (even though i think it s far from excellent).
it s just something i wrote after reading a newspaper article.. not sure if the topic is recognizable. had to google dover beach and found a scifi novel and a poem.. did you mean the poem ?
oh, and thanks for introducing me to george burns .

The poem - the long roar, the ignorant armies.  You're welcome for George Burns:  just looked it up, the movie was "Going in Style" (1979) and the actual quote was, "They don't know it, but they're all older than me."

Still think it's excellent - maybe you underrate the inspriation.
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