The Eye(TI part2)
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Hey guys, this is the second part of my poem, The Inevitable. I hope you like it. If you have'nt read the first part, it is in my threads.

"The Eye"

Are you tired of this yet?
This closed door mindset.
Accept it,
the debt you are owed.

Something you don't know,
Something you've been shown.
Everything you are,
you are not alone.

This eye that you know,
is no eye at all.
There is no fog,
except the fog you that you grow.

Ignore the eye,
and accept the rain.
Ignore the brain,
and open your eyes.

Dark clouds overhead
Are there cause you made them.
Let go of the storm,
and let the storm feel rejected.
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There is no fog,
except the fog you that you grow.


That seems the best part to me.
You have something going here, if only you could dig something deeper or at least more novel out of it.
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