surreal panting of new romance
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druid princess in austin, so naked and provocative
waiting for a foolin ship of mercenaries and street-junkies
and a fool ship shippin' fools for the longcount count of longships

a druid fool captainin' counts of longcalls mayan or aztec 
pomegranate avid avocado throes and monkey keys
terrible real estate on jupiters' moons

composers of symphonies avoiding the voided notes and voted vox and vortex
gaffed and jarred or cudgeled all around the stars of scorpio 
till townes van sandt threw down his axe, how it stung

recording the loons of prine on vinyl is being vinyled on a road of dirt
and the tall trees pine in the park and with donnie dark, cellar door
my girl you slept with me last night, as I resisted your titties

with patty griffin barkin at the bark
of the pine and the moon pinin' patsy cline patsied
sweet home alabama and lynyrd bein' skynyrd

i thought of the old cuts new and the wood bark blue
the soft white pine and the whole milk vine
the green night soft and the pine needles on her back when i picked her up
plutocratic polyphonous pandering 
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While I enjoy some of the word play, the opening strophes are rough for me to get through so far. I enjoyed the musical references and found that section fun to read. But I found this:

Quote:i thought of the old cuts new and the wood bark blue
the soft white pine and the whole milk vine
the green night soft and the pine needles on her back when i picked her up

really lovely.

Thanks for posting. Smile



(01-04-2018, 12:13 AM)Thunderembargo Wrote:  druid princess in austin, so naked and provocative
waiting for a foolin ship of mercenaries and street-junkies
and a fool ship shippin' fools for the longcount count of longships

a druid fool captainin' counts of longcalls mayan or aztec 
pomegranate avid avocado throes and monkey keys
terrible real estate on jupiters' moons

composers of symphonies avoiding the voided notes and voted vox and vortex
gaffed and jarred or cudgeled all around the stars of scorpio 
till townes van sandt threw down his axe, how it stung

recording the loons of prine on vinyl is being vinyled on a road of dirt
and the tall trees pine in the park and with donnie dark, cellar door
my girl you slept with me last night, as I resisted your titties

with patty griffin barkin at the bark
of the pine and the moon pinin' patsy cline patsied
sweet home alabama and lynyrd bein' skynyrd

i thought of the old cuts new and the wood bark blue
the soft white pine and the whole milk vine
the green night soft and the pine needles on her back when i picked her up
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