Listen, Clever Clogs
#1
Listen, Clever Clogs
 
This is what happens
when genius forgets itself;
 
when unrepentant clever
forsakes and is forsaken.
 
It's cold outside.
 
The only hope
is in implosion-
 
a Hail Mary
by any name.

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(12-27-2017, 09:04 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  Listen, Clever Clogs
 
This is what happens
when genius forgets itself;
 
when unrepentant clever
forsakes and is forsaken.
 
It's cold outside.
 
The only hope
is in implosion-
 
a Hail Mary
by any name.

somehow the line "hail mary by any name" has a really strong impact.
(besides the prayer i googled some last ditch effort sports move)
i am not even sure how to connect it to implosion, only implosion seems like a solitary solution.

the beginning of the poem seems to paraphrase "those who criticize are more likely to be criticized" .. i think nobody should hold back out of fear to be criticized, although this probably has some inherent flaws, like personal error doing harm.
i wonder if this is at least in the vicinity of what you wrote about; anyway, thank you for the read.
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It took me many reads to accept "implosion" in the position it's in. I kept thinking the first 4 lines were the implosion, so how is it the only hope? It finally fits together for me, I knew it had to be my own block. Smile

We have a saying about kids in my family: "We don't need no stinkin' geniuses." It's rare, IME, to find a happy one.

(12-27-2017, 09:04 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  Listen, Clever Clogs
 
This is what happens
when genius forgets itself;
 
when unrepentant clever
forsakes and is forsaken.
 
It's cold outside.
 
The only hope
is in implosion-
 
a Hail Mary
by any name.
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Listen, Clever Clogs
 
This is what happens
when genius forgets itself;
 
when unrepentant clever
forsakes and is forsaken.
 
It's cold outside.
 
The only hope
is in implosion-
 
a Hail Mary
by any name.




I went in different angles while reading this poem. I didn't know Clever Clogs was a term, and only learned so by googling. Right off I thought forsakes and is forsaken is very harsh and judgemental. So I thought about clogs, like in plumbing, then I thought about clogs, wooden shoes. Then I thought about someone standing on the porch in the cold, locked out, realizing he had lost his key. Having to cave and call his wife or significant other to get back in the house.


clever poem

-nibbed
there's always a better reason to love
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