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Listen, Clever Clogs
 
This is what happens
when genius forgets itself;
 
when unrepentant clever
forsakes and is forsaken.
 
It's cold outside.
 
The only hope
is in implosion-
 
a Hail Mary
by any name.

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(12-27-2017, 09:04 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  Listen, Clever Clogs
 
This is what happens
when genius forgets itself;
 
when unrepentant clever
forsakes and is forsaken.
 
It's cold outside.
 
The only hope
is in implosion-
 
a Hail Mary
by any name.

somehow the line "hail mary by any name" has a really strong impact.
(besides the prayer i googled some last ditch effort sports move)
i am not even sure how to connect it to implosion, only implosion seems like a solitary solution.

the beginning of the poem seems to paraphrase "those who criticize are more likely to be criticized" .. i think nobody should hold back out of fear to be criticized, although this probably has some inherent flaws, like personal error doing harm.
i wonder if this is at least in the vicinity of what you wrote about; anyway, thank you for the read.
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It took me many reads to accept "implosion" in the position it's in. I kept thinking the first 4 lines were the implosion, so how is it the only hope? It finally fits together for me, I knew it had to be my own block. Smile

We have a saying about kids in my family: "We don't need no stinkin' geniuses." It's rare, IME, to find a happy one.

(12-27-2017, 09:04 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  Listen, Clever Clogs
 
This is what happens
when genius forgets itself;
 
when unrepentant clever
forsakes and is forsaken.
 
It's cold outside.
 
The only hope
is in implosion-
 
a Hail Mary
by any name.
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