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                İmage


                                                                    < existential >

                                                            My winsome Bavarian Rose,
                                                            I'm crazy with love, head to toes.
                                                            You've filled me with kisses,
                                                            (and cozy night blisses );
                                                            Oh my!  How my silly heart glows.

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#2
this colour endangers clear sight-
lovely thought what else it might..
i´m sleeping on roses
and my eveningly dosis
of pink poems painting the night.
...
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#3
it's quite beautiful, rayheinrich.
there's always a better reason to love
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#4
(12-18-2017, 06:45 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  


                İmage


                                                                    < existential >

                                                            My winsome Bavarian Rose,
                                                            I'm crazy with love, head to toes.
                                                            You've filled me with kisses,
                                                            (and cozy night blisses );
                                                            Oh my!  How my silly heart glows.

                                                                            - - -





I'd thought for a second there that you hadn't put a picture in this, it took quite a while to load. That said -----
with that first line, I don't think the image is at all necessary: if anything, it's a bit of a detriment, considering the redundancy it introduces. I also don't see the significance of the title, although rooting existence to love is a sentiment I really like, so I suppose this latter point's aporia to me.
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#5
I felt a quickening when I saw these two little announcements of your return: < and > Big Grin 

I love how you do love poetry in a way that it's ok. Usually, I cannot bear it. I think this works for me because you're not trying to make love seem too epic or earth-shattering -- I think "silly" helps in this vein, the slight bit of bemusement with the self.

Another thing I love about this poem: Ray is back! Ray is back! Ray is back! Ray is back! 

big hug
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#6
(12-18-2017, 04:01 PM)Lizzie Wrote:  I felt a quickening when I saw these two little announcements of your return: < and > Big Grin 

I love how you do love poetry in a way that it's ok. Usually, I cannot bear it. I think this works for me because you're not trying to make love seem too epic or earth-shattering -- I think "silly" helps in this vein, the slight bit of bemusement with the self.

Another thing I love about this poem: Ray is back! Ray is back! Ray is back! Ray is back! 

big hug

Agreed.

it wouldn't kill you
to call more often,
silly boy

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