He Wondered, Half Fell...
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He Wondered, Half Fell...
        after Finnegans Wake


He wondered, half fell and half open:
—Oh help me, kind Sir,
to take off this fur,
for the moment has come to be woken.

But he couldn’t be woken,
his mouth had been broken,
his teeth were all liquid and bare.
And by the same token,
no, nothing was spoken,
not even the simplest prayer.

So he wandered half rent and half stone.
—Oh please take this thinking,
all rotten and stinking,
and fettered like flesh by the bone,

and wrap it up tight
in the dead of the night,
when the dead of the night are at home;
then, throw it away 
past the bend of the bay,
where the bend of the bay dare not go!
'The only way to deal with an unfree world is to become so absolutely free that your very existence is an act of rebellion.'

—Albert Camus


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Good one by your standards, Penman
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe
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(12-03-2017, 10:33 AM)shemthepenman Wrote:   He Wondered, Half Fell...
        after Finnegans Wake


He wondered, half fell and half open:           fell made me think of animal fur..   half open.. like half open eyes or half awake?
—Oh help me, kind Sir,
to take off this fur,
for the moment has come to be woken.                     

But he couldn’t be woken,
his mouth had been broken,                    
his teeth were all liquid and bare.                  so.. the inside fermenting/ dissolving and maybe leaking out but not for the purpose of communication
And by the same token,                                the token is same to what? or is "same" part of an idiom i don´t know?
no, nothing was spoken,
not even the simplest prayer.                       

So he wandered half rent and half stone.            
—Oh please take this thinking,
all rotten and stinking,
and fettered like flesh by the bone,        i like how this meta seems to fix those decaying thoughts to their bones.


and wrap it up tight
in the dead of the night,                   
when the dead of the night are at home;        
then, throw it away                                               stumbled over that comma
past the bend of the bay,                        sounds like end of the day.. somehow intrigueing
where the bend of the bay dare not go!

i like the bizarre and morbid content packed in rhyme and meter.
what i vaguely got from this is how thoughts can be a rotting, paralyzing thing.
a mute death in the second stanza and then finnegan turns into some zombie.. or maybe was before.
can´t make "sense" of  the dead of the night and the poem´s last line .  (is it necessary to have read the book?)
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(12-07-2017, 02:04 AM)vagabond Wrote:  
(12-03-2017, 10:33 AM)shemthepenman Wrote:   He Wondered, Half Fell...
        after Finnegans Wake


He wondered, half fell and half open:           fell made me think of animal fur..   half open.. like half open eyes or half awake?
—Oh help me, kind Sir,
to take off this fur,
for the moment has come to be woken.                     

But he couldn’t be woken,
his mouth had been broken,                    
his teeth were all liquid and bare.                  so.. the inside fermenting/ dissolving and maybe leaking out but not for the purpose of communication
And by the same token,                                the token is same to what? or is "same" part of an idiom i don´t know?
no, nothing was spoken,
not even the simplest prayer.                       

So he wandered half rent and half stone.            
—Oh please take this thinking,
all rotten and stinking,
and fettered like flesh by the bone,        i like how this meta seems to fix those decaying thoughts to their bones.


and wrap it up tight
in the dead of the night,                   
when the dead of the night are at home;        
then, throw it away                                               stumbled over that comma
past the bend of the bay,                        sounds like end of the day.. somehow intrigueing
where the bend of the bay dare not go!

i like the bizarre and morbid content packed in rhyme and meter.
what i vaguely got from this is how thoughts can be a rotting, paralyzing thing.
a mute death in the second stanza and then finnegan turns into some zombie.. or maybe was before.
can´t make "sense" of  the dead of the night and the poem´s last line .  (is it necessary to have read the book?)

it does help, i suppose, to have read finnegans wake. 
however, it’s not entirely necessary—although, i’d recommend reading it anyway.
i can quickly sketch out the scaffolding without going too far into explanatory detail. 
finnegans wake is to be contrasted with ulysses by virtue of it being set in the evening (ulysses being set over the course of a single day). this is actually an important concept in the novel. 
the novel begins with finnegan falling off a ladder and dying. 
the first sentence in finnegans wake (which is also the last) goes: '...riverrun, past Eve and Adams, from swerve of shore to bend of bay, brings us by a commodius vicus of recirculation back to Howth Castle and Environs.' and my last line “where the bend of the bay dare not go” is a nod to that and also, more practically, i suppose, just representative of an abstract void. or the sea, of course.
by the same token simply means for the same reason or the same causes as previously mentioned. his mouth was broken and for that reason nothing was spoken. 
the dead of the night just means the darkest time of night. when everything is still and quite and... well, dead.

the comma is grammatically correct, but possibly unnecessary. will consider editing. i wanted to make the punctuation noticeable, as in a lot of Joyce’s work.
'The only way to deal with an unfree world is to become so absolutely free that your very existence is an act of rebellion.'

—Albert Camus


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thanks for explaining, especially "token".
maybe i ll take a look into finnegan´s wake, now that i have read the poetic summary (just joking, i think your poem tells its own story).
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this is good
thank you
for posting, shem


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