Cherished
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Cherished (Edit 1.1, Tiger)

Blarney Girls Band
plays Thai Rock on Jamaica Bay:
long tables of New York Irish,
aging Jewish schoolmate/FB pals,
Asian families trickling home late
to a shared meal.

Eating and drinking,
grinning, clapping, jigging,

fortified for the morning news.

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(07-13-2017, 11:29 AM)ellajam Wrote:  Cherished

Blarney Girls Band
plays Thai Rock on Jamaica Bay:
long tables of New York Irish families, I would strike this first instance of families. Sounds tight without it and avoids the repetition.
aging Jewish schoolmate/FB pals,
Asian families trickling home late
to a shared meal.

Eating and drinking,
grinning, clapping, jigging, no fiddling?

fortified for the morning news. fortified is a great word choice Thumbsup




Thanks for the jig Ella.

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Thanks, Tiger, I believe you're right on the first families, edited. No fiddling in the audience, but the lead's boyfriend did but on a pair of jig shoes, becoming the 4th instrument on one. Big Grin There's a bit of it on Thai Rock's FB (restaurant, rockaway)

Thanks for the read and comments. Smile
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