disturbing broadcast (edit)
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disturbing broadcast                                                                                (edit thanks to waneerie and nibbed)

 
pictures of terror and mass destruction
in the 8 o´clock news, preceding the fiction,
reality plotted, directing my fears.
It´s a relief I don´t want to be clear,
so I skip africa and those japanese shores,
commercials are urging there´s more in the stores.

 
another good vs bad, action doesn´t do harm,
the girl´s makeup reminds me of animal farm.
heros must win, I know that one by heart,
as globalization tears nations apart
and financial times are economic wars,
but cinema´s near and all else is far.




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disturbing broadcast


pictures of terror and mass destruction
in the 8 o´clock news, preceding the fiction,  
this neutral, calm voice, directed at fears.
Well, it´s a relief I don´t have to be clear.
so I skip africa and those japanese shores,
commercials are urging there´s more in the stores.
 
another good vs bad, action doesn´t do harm,
the girl´s makeup reminds me of animal farm.
heros must win, I know that one by heart,
while globalization tears nations apart
and financial times are economic wars.
but cinema´s near and all else is far.


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There's a general feeling of "moral high ground" to the whole poem, and I'm not sure whether it's intended to be an admission of guilt from the author, who confesses they'd rather be distracted than take action, somehow, or it is an attempt to voice an average "joe / joelle" with their listless attempt cover their indifference, but I found it interesting either way.

Also the slight imprecisions in the rhymes (which are assonance in a few cases, namely "wars - far" and "fears - clear"), although probably not purposefully, contribute the general idea of an uninterested westerner (or whoever else is not directly touched by said horrors). Even though I'm not a fan of the sort of "slam-poetrish" vibe this poem bears, I think there might be a cunning hidden critique deeper than the blatant accusation, or maybe I hope so, to be absolutely honest =)
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hi vagabond, this poem is how I often feel
throughout that "regular programming".



disturbing broadcast                                                           


pictures of terror and mass destruction
in the 8 o´clock news, preceding the fiction,  
this neutral, calm voice, directed at fears.                          seems to be a run-on sentence
Well, it´s a relief I don´t have to be clear.                           i'd trade this period for a comma
so I skip africa and those japanese shores,
commercials are urging there´s more in the stores.
 
another good vs bad, action doesn´t do harm,                  
the girl´s makeup reminds me of animal farm.                 I'm wondering, but it made me smile nonetheless    
heros must win, I know that one by heart,                         the sandwich or the galiant ones? (heroes)
while globalization tears nations apart                              clever metaphor
and financial times are economic wars.                             another run-on sentence
but cinema´s near and all else is far.                                  


thanks vagabond
have a blessed evening!
janine
Janine Burke
there's always a better reason to love

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