Coin Exchange (Audio)
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http://k002.kiwi6.com/hotlink/zt539q68fc...e_1_2_.mp3

Come over here Sir,
let me take your hat there,
come and relax in my chair.

I'll shine your shoes,
you can't lose,
read all about them in the evening news.

Just half a Crown,
and don't you frown,
or that big bloke will knock you down.

Don't you run,
he's got a gun,
only joking where's your sense of fun?

Let’s have your purse,
please don't curse,
If you struggle it'll make it worse.

Have your hat there, get out of my chair,
time you were on your way, Sir.
Someone please, stop these thieves.

What’s going on? Don’t' try and run
you'll be in prison before your day is done.
Officer, we wouldn't dare,
this gent here tried to pinch my chair,
put us down and here's a crown
here’s another not to get sent down.

Be on your way and mind you stay
away from me or I'll have my day.
This isn't funny, they stole my money,
you’re a disgrace, bribes to you seem common place.

Now listen Sir, life isn’t fair, when you try to steal a chair,
but don’t you frown, here’s a Crown,
now go about your business or I’ll take you down.

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#2
This one had me both smiling and a bit perplexed in that you had me by surprise when i heard you read this in a sing song tone. (Got different voices when i read it first, but like your intended song tone as well).
? line of text missing from above to what you read out for audio. (last line of stanza 6 missing).

Good fun
AJ.
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#3
(06-05-2013, 05:44 AM)cidermaid Wrote:  This one had me both smiling and a bit perplexed in that you had me by surprise when i heard you read this in a sing song tone. (Got different voices when i read it first, but like your intended song tone as well).
? line of text missing from above to what you read out for audio. (last line of stanza 6 missing).

Good fun
AJ.

Many thanks AJ, I had a giggle doing this one, its funny when I first posted this one I had comments about it being rap so I had to do the audio just to set the record straight Smile line missing ? well spotted I amended this for posting and the recording was an old one I will edit the line Thanks for taking the time. Keith

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#4
Thanks for posting the link, Keith! Much enjoyed. I was surprised how your voice & rhythm vs. just me reading changed the poem completely. Not in a bad way, just sort of magical and lively, with jig-like qualities. Almost changed it from dark to light? I almost imagined hearing parts of it at a Renaissance Festival.
Very folksy tune!

thank you kindly
nibbed
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#5
What a huge difference between the words on the page and the words through the ear. I like the way your sing-song narrative first sounds unthreatening, like a children's verse - then, somehow, not so nice.

Stealing a chair - taking away the solid ground? For me there's a relationship between the narrator and the person addressed which feels at the same time like a class contrast, and a line from Queen - '...very very frightening...'

Mama mia - I like this. Your voice adds a lot to the words on the page.
Poetry can be dangerous, especially beautiful poetry, because it gives the illusion of having had the experience without actually going through it.

~ Rumi
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(07-09-2017, 12:55 PM)nibbed Wrote:  Thanks for posting the link, Keith! Much enjoyed. I was surprised how your voice & rhythm vs. just me reading changed the poem completely. Not in a bad way, just sort of magical and lively, with jig-like qualities. Almost changed it from dark to light? I almost imagined hearing parts of it at a Renaissance Festival.
Very folksy tune!

thank you kindly
nibbed

Thank you nibbed, this was a long time ago, I also like listening to the changes an audio can bring, not enough poets do it IMHO
Best Keith

(07-09-2017, 08:30 PM)just mercedes Wrote:  What a huge difference between the words on the page and the words through the ear. I like the way your sing-song narrative first sounds unthreatening, like a children's verse - then, somehow, not so nice.

Stealing a chair - taking away the solid ground? For me there's a relationship between the narrator and the person addressed which feels at the same time like a class contrast, and a line from Queen - '...very very frightening...'

Mama mia - I like this. Your voice adds a lot to the words on the page.

Thank you Mercedes this is quite an old one in my short life as a would be poet. I think I was going for a Javert type charater meeting my own Jean Valjean's, good job the film directors didn't hear this, I could have been the next Russell Crowe, oh no hang on, I can sing Big Grin

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