Need translation help, please
Thanks Steve (and daughter),
Her translation is very close to what I intended, with the exceptions of 'jolie=beautiful' where my thought was 'jolie=lovely'
and 'lueur=light', where my thought was ''lueur=glow'. 

I originally used 'vous=you' instead of 'tu=you', but realized that the more formal 'vous' does not work when the intent is more personal, more intimate.

Subtle yet important differences. 

Thanks busker-
The trans-literation is interesting.  I did struggle with 'sing'.  Would a French person say 'chantez'? Or would it be 'chantes' or another conjugation? 

I wrote this wondering how the words would sound when sung.  If a French person is listening, then would the way I wrote it sound right to them?

I wanted to try this experiment since I find French more lyrical than English (esp American English).  I always wanted to write a love song in French, and wanted to hear how the two languages sounded side-by-side.  Since I'm not a native French speaker, I found it to be an interesting challenge.

I want it to make sense, and be accurate, too.


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Need translation help, please - by Mark A Becker - 01-29-2023, 04:02 AM
RE: Need translation help, please - by brynmawr1 - 01-29-2023, 08:50 AM
RE: Need translation help, please - by busker - 01-29-2023, 02:51 PM
RE: Need translation help, please - by Mark A Becker - 01-30-2023, 12:11 AM

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