A few lines

[Mark A Becker]

Hello again b.realist,

‘pass’ and ‘glass’ would work vs ‘rest’ and ‘chalice’.

I suggest ‘over    head’ to follow the line about stars.

Maybe just ‘grape vines’, then something about ‘wines’.

The ‘stay alive’ part is just telling without showing, and messes up the images for me.

I’m confident that you’ll get to the ‘empty ???’ ending with a bit more work.
Mark