A few lines

[Mark A Becker]

I started this a couple of days ago and have no ambition to keep it going. So I figured this is a good one to post for critiques.
and the moons shine
and the suns rise
and the stars go and rest 
as the wines thrive
we stay alive and drink
down to an empty chalice

Hi burr-
The bolded part needs work.

'chalice' seems too archaic, but should be easy to fix.

That said, I am a BIG FAN of short poems.  The trouble with them is that every word counts- leaving out the superflous ones is where I'd start.

Please find the ambition to keep it going- you may be surprised with how it turns out.

Mark