Foam (burrealist)

[Semicircle]

...liked your lines


Moonshine sinks
each sun rise.

Pilings corkscrew
in mercurial tide,

cranes migrating
for winter.


Down the pier
on the final beam

a dented can.

[Mark A Becker]

Hi slicer-
Some suggested changes below:

Moonshine sinks
each sun rise.

Pilings corkscrew 
in mercurial tide,

cranes migrating
for winter.


Down the pier
on the final beam

a dented can.

[Semicircle]

Appreciate it Mark.

I like what you did with the line breaks,
makes the poem seem fragmented.