Unconscious

[Semicircle]

My eyes are stinging,
sleep will take me soon.

It's my choice to rest, I could stay awake
if I wanted to. Yet I'm tired, and there is
no use in fighting anymore

as I am dragged unconscious
across the forest floor.

[burrealist]

My only critique here:

"It's my choice to rest, I could stay awake
if I wanted to. Yet, I'm tired, and there is <---------I don't think the common after Yet is necessary
no use in fighting anymore"

so instead:

"if I wanted to. Yet I'm tired, and there is"

The commas were creating a rhythm, and it feels awkward to have that rhythm changed by a "non-sequitur" comma.