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sitting by a quiet river,
a beautiful scene,
my mind is preoccupied,
with thoughts of a big-mac.
(12-08-2012, 07:07 PM)benthejack Wrote: [ -> ]sitting by a quiet river,
a beautiful scene,
my mind is preoccupied,
with thoughts of a big-mac.

Mmmm mine wasn't but it is now nice contrastBig Grin
in my poem its a kfc chicken Big Grin
thought this wos hilarious..erm soz if it werent meant to be Smile
(12-08-2012, 07:07 PM)benthejack Wrote: [ -> ]sitting by a quiet river,
a beautiful scene,
my mind is preoccupied,
with thoughts of a big-mac.
woop woop next stop my thigh
I also really hope this was meant to be funny
(12-13-2012, 07:17 AM)Jae Mc Donnell Wrote: [ -> ]
(12-08-2012, 07:07 PM)benthejack Wrote: [ -> ]sitting by a quiet river,
a beautiful scene,
my mind is preoccupied,
with thoughts of a big-mac.
woop woop next stop my thigh
I also really hope this was meant to be funny

haha yeah, was definitely a piss take.
haha yeah, was definitely a piss take.
[/quote]Thank god mate. Didn't want someone sitting at home thinking (those pricks me here pooring my heart out and this is what I get.. Strongly worded letter that's what's happing now.. No even better a poem and the I'll post it.....awhh)......HABig Grin
Anywho very funny poem mate.Thumbs up.
(12-08-2012, 07:07 PM)benthejack Wrote: [ -> ]with thoughts of a big-mac.

I was hoping I wouldn't be the first to say it! What a juicy, wonderful phrase. Oh man am I hungry, and I hate you for it. (just kidding)
I don't think the second line is needed. Without it you could almost have a haiku. The third comma could also go. All in all it's a funny poem, countering a somber image with a cockeyed punchline. Thanks for the readSmile
not gonna lie, now i want a big mac.