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If you watch the
wood - the wood
will break.
for me it work better if you used a would in the poems body.
still, it's a nice concept.
This reminds me of this short poem by Philip Larkin:

This is the first thing
I have understood:
Time is the echo of an axe
Within a wood.

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Like Billy I enjoyed the concept, but I think it needs fleshing out more. Something this short should work like an aphorism. Something that doesn't have to be clarified but grabs the reader with its wisdom right away.
Short. Nice. Thought provoking. Clever.
I like it!
R.Y.
Smile Thank you.