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I'll be gone soon,
better things are coming.

Forget about this stuff,
it's not important.

Just wait.

This is lovely, Semicircle.

A wonderful metaphor using a term I had never heard before reading it and giving it a google.

Our little problems will all be gone soon enough - reading this poem is like taking a long, slow breath.

Thought-provoking, I had to Google it too.

Well slicer-

Good short one here- especially 'just wait' at the end. Don't know that 'yeah, and' is needed though- it only slowed me down heading for that punch line. Yeah, and it ain't adding anything for me.

I guess we're all sort of place holders.

Thanks,
Mark

Thanks for the words Wjames and galaxitchi


I figured the 'yeah and' made the poem seem more like a confession

but it does seem to be more effective without something to connect to.

Thanks Mark.