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I more or less

want more

and more

of less

(02-05-2023, 07:13 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote: [ -> ]I more or less

want more

and more

of less

and less

Well that's one way to appeal to my love of brevity. Well crafted. It's original and well worn at the same time. I almost want to strike the last line. I think you probably need it, but it reads well without it also.

(02-05-2023, 08:31 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: [ -> ]Well that's one way to appeal to my love of brevity. Well crafted. It's original and well worn at the same time. I almost want to strike the last line. I think you probably need it, but it reads well without it also.

HA!-
Always looking for a way to do more with less, I second your suggestion, and have stricken the last line. I like the way the line lengths now shorten from 8 letters, to 7, to 6.
Thanks Paul,
Mark