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The fog was aglow with moths
buzzing fluorescent patterns
towards infinity.
I like the images and I see the flight pattern of the moth like a Lissajous figure drawing out the symbol for infinity, do moths buzz? there has to be something more descriptive and less ordinary. Best Keith
Thanks Keith, the buzzing was supposed to more be the sound of a street light (and somewhat descriptive of the moth), and infinity was supposed to represent death when they hit the light.

I think I need to clear this one up a bit, maybe explicitly mention the street light.
You might consider using death instead of infinity, say what you mean. Smile