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I wrote a verse
then erased it.

Here it is. 



                                       Do you like it?
                                       The silence?  The purity of space?

                                       The blather doesn't blah-blah
                                       the space of what you say.





The original thread and comments can be found here

*Note from Admin: This poem was originally posted in the "For Fun" forum, and the comments were delivered in the spirit of fun; however, this is a poem to which I have returned numerous times and each time the effect has been different.  

Sometimes, we just can't predict what's going to work for us.  This works, and I know I'm not alone in thinking that.  Cheers Kolemath! ~ Leanne

I will admit that this is one I've come back to a few times (which in itself probably makes the poem more successful than most). It might surprise Kole that this is the one that got spotlighted, but I can see why it was. Nice choice Leanne!

Kole really does some excellent work in the "For Fun" forum. Well, deserved. Congratulations, Kole!!!

I enjoy this every time, it speaks to my state of mind.

It's a joy watching kolemath use the site so well.

Congrats!

I, too, like this. Maybe empty minds think alike!

Totally agree with this choice. I read it in critique but had nothing to offer. It's concise and thoughtful.

(11-09-2016, 05:14 AM)Leanne Wrote: [ -> ]Say Something

I wrote a verse
then erased it.

Here it is. 



                                       Do you like it?
                                       The silence?  The purity of space?

                                       The blather doesn't blah-blah
                                       the space of what you say.





The original thread and comments can be found here

*Note from Admin: This poem was originally posted in the "For Fun" forum, and the comments were delivered in the spirit of fun; however, this is a poem to which I have returned numerous times and each time the effect has been different.  

Sometimes, we just can't predict what's going to work for us.  This works, and I know I'm not alone in thinking that.  Cheers Kolemath! ~ Leanne

even if billy says his muse is gone, he can still bemuse a poem.    
http://www.pigpenpoetry.com/thread-19569.html :D


thanks for the spotlight, leanne! it will be listed with other achievements in my obituary