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It all began (as most things do)
across the froth of Billy's brew
last Sunday;
a harmless joke about a friend
would somehow see the friendship end
by Monday.

A newbie's innocent remark
was all it took to turn things dark
and painful;
'twas meant to most sincerely praise
and yet it earned a bitter gaze,
disdainful.

Dale tried hard to calm the air
while milo flexed upon his chair,
all tautness.
"Leanne, I only said that you
write just like Maya Angelou!"
cried Thoughtless.

Drinks were downed and pens were out --
such a blow can't pass without 
reaction.
Todd joined in -- he knew the score --
soon the bar was lost to war
(abstraction)

Tom and Ella took up guard,
on the floor, the noob lay charred,
and cried:
"I take it back, your vengeful wrath
is reminiscent more of Plath,"
and died.
i shall go back to bed for a good giggle

just mercedes

You make it look easy because your flow is so smooth. You have to push a lot of words around before that happens.

I didn't realize 'wrath' rhymed with 'Plath' - I always say it as 'roth' because that's what the minister used to say in church - The roth of God! and I loved the three sound-rhymes in a row.

Or maybe I could just call Sylvia 'Ploth'?
I think I'd prefer Ploth.  I really only wanted the sight rhyme but I think she's kind of Plothy.

PS. It's rime couee -- one of my favourite schemes but it takes some thinking  Big Grin
I scoured the boards to see
this battle of poesy
but found only the usual posts and commentary
given without having read
poems better left for dead -
no trace of this great saga told by thee.
The doors of the old woolshed
in Coonabarabran are scrubbed
each day to kill graffiti.
Did the newbie poet, snubbed,
his cigarette of fancy stubbed,
delete all his pompous posts from the piggery?
The level of improvisation that seems to flow these threads is inspiring. I think my language needs rewiring
Oh I know what you mean!!!! I feel the same way. It's terribly intimidating, but also educational. Big Grin
(10-03-2016, 10:13 AM)Achebe Wrote: [ -> ]I scoured the boards to see
this battle of poesy
but found only the usual posts and commentary
given without having read
poems better left for dead -
no trace of this great saga told by thee.
The doors of the old woolshed
in Coonabarabran are scrubbed
each day to kill graffiti.
Did the newbie poet, snubbed,
his cigarette of fancy stubbed,
delete all his pompous posts from the piggery?
This is a tale of purest confection
born of disdain and dispensed without care;
never did happen, this vile insurrection --
everyone knows that my temper is fair.

Newbies are never annoying, I swear,
reading the rules before posting a jot,
full critiques given with several more spare,
very respectful, more often than not.

No darling newbie has ever been shot,
stabbed or exploded -- you're right to have doubted --
Dale's never calm, Todd just giggles a lot,
Billy's a Pom so he'd never have shouted.

This event's fiction, although on reflection
I wouldn't fight -- I prefer vivisection.