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The plum farm was struggling
since it’s plumbing had burst.
Old man johnson was sour
but was not well rehearsed,
like a plum that’s still green
or a poet's first verse;
he resolved to expunge
all the plums from the earth.
enjoyed the plum rhymes and puns.
Plum-a-verse.

dale
I believe you've plumbed the depths of this one.
A real peach.
This would hold its own in Serious Workshopping, if only because the rhymes and rhythm are so well arranged. It's funny, too!
Thanks for reading. All the serious things I was trying to write seemed a little ridiculous, so I decided to write the most ridiculous thing I could.
haha glorious. love how fun this poem is. fun read, thanks for the post!
(04-07-2016, 03:08 AM)Wjames Wrote: [ -> ]Thanks for reading. All the serious things I was trying to write seemed a little ridiculous, so I decided to write the most ridiculous thing I could.
I could try reading a super-serious meaning into this (and this is good enough for something like that to be coherent, and outside of the premise be not at all silly) but I don't think I'm skilled enough. Maybe something about the holocaust?  xS
(04-01-2016, 11:47 AM)Wjames Wrote: [ -> ]The plum farm was struggling
since it’s plumbing had burst.
Old man johnson was sour
but was not well rehearsed,
like a plum that’s still green
or a poet's first verse;
he resolved to expunge
all the plums from the earth.


I love the consistent double meanings Big Grin It's very balanced and well written, but why isn't Johnson capitalized?
Thanks for the read!