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I know nothing moves:
impulses always flowing,
currents always still
(10-16-2015, 11:33 PM)RiverNotch Wrote: [ -> ]I know nothing moves:
impulses always flowing,
currents always still

I don't think you need the 2 always's -- I don't see how it's beneficial as opposed to saying "impulses flow" "currents lay still", or something to that effect. But, I certainly wouldn't have two of them.