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Now sit down,
back straight, think pure thoughts
bed by eight.

We will tell you what to like,
sub-serve the governmental might,
happy now your shirt is clean,
we control the things you dream.

Off Essex coast a storm revolves,
evolves behind a bulk head door,
magnetic waves straight to shore.

Pirate supply meets demand,
stranded hull scrapes onto sand,
a million listener's battles won,
you had to give us radio one.

So I guess you thought that
would stop the rot,
a safety pin nose
the smell of punk rock.
I really have no idea what this is about, but it does seem as though some of your lines are more or less rhyme driven. My personal feeling is that a word cannot be rhymed with itself, and this applies even when the words are different if they sound the same, i.e., "won" and "one". Is there really a "radio one" or did you just make that up for the rhyme?

I have no idea what "magnet waves straight to shore" means. What are magnet waves? Do you mean "Magnetic Waves"?

I'm also not sure how "a storm revolves, evolves behind a bulk head door," unless you mean an emotional storm.

I'm not sure what you are trying to say here, "a million listeners battles won" but it seems like an apostrophe is in order.

"So I guess you thought that would stop the rot" What rot?

On the positive side, I guess this is more or less in iambic tetrameter except for the first stanza.

Very confuting.

dale
(10-02-2013, 11:26 PM)Erthona Wrote: [ -> ]I really have no idea what this is about, but it does seem as though some of your lines are more or less rhyme driven. My personal feeling is that a word cannot be rhymed with itself, and this applies even when the words are different if they sound the same, i.e., "won" and "one". Is there really a "radio one" or did you just make that up for the rhyme?

I have no idea what "magnet waves straight to shore" means. What are magnet waves? Do you mean "Magnetic Waves"?

I'm also not sure how "a storm revolves, evolves behind a bulk head door," unless you mean an emotional storm.

I'm not sure what you are trying to say here, "a million listeners battles won" but it seems like an apostrophe is in order.

"So I guess you thought that would stop the rot" What rot?

On the positive side, I guess this is more or less in iambic tetrameter except for the first stanza.

Very confuting.

dale

Hi Dale
I seem to be quite good at doing confusion and thank you for the magnetic, changed it. This one is about one of the ships used by pirate radio in the 60's and 70's (Radio Caroline) Despite attempts from the government to control and ban them, they carried on corrupting the listeners until good old BBC was forced to launch Radio one to play popular music. The BBC have five main radio stations 1,2,3,4 and surprise 5, I know its highly original. The only official chart for many years in the UK was played on R1. Radio Caroline was transmitted from an old Dutch fishing trawler Mi Amigo and anchored just outside territorial waters they played the music the country wanted to hear not the sterile old crap that was on government controlled stations. We owe a lot to the Pirates of Radio Caroline. Sorry this is a bit wordy, I hope your confusion has cleared. TOMH
Thanks for the explanation.

Dale